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Jayko the jungle boy and bianca met nightmare

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One Day, A Tigress was walking through the Jungle. Her name was Tania and she was returning to her den after a day of hunting. On the way she heard the sound of Crying. She followed the sound to the north. She then found a plane that had crashed. She kept following the sound of the crying until she discovered a basket with a human child inside. It was a boy. As she peeked into the basket, the baby boy stopped crying.

"Hello little fellow." Said Tania, as she looked around, "I wonder where his parents are?" She then spotted their bodies nearby lying dead.  "They must've died in the crash." Said Tania. She then spotted a toy T-Rex. She picked it up and Gave it to the baby. The boy then hugged it. Tania then noticed a word on the Basket: Jayko. "That must be his name." Tania thought.

Knowing the child won't last long in the jungle alone, Tania decided to adopt Jayko and raise him as her own. And so she picked up the Basket and took it to her cave, which luckily wasn't to far away. Once she got there, Tania spotted her to children, fang and claw playing together. Fang was a girl with green eyes and claw was a male with yellow eyes.

After putting down the basket, Tania called to her cubs saying, "Fang, Claw! Come here, I have something to show you." Once they heard their mother, they ran up to her. "What is it mum?" Asked Fang. "I would like you two to meet your new brother Jayko." Said Tania, motioning to the basket in front of her. As the cubs looked into the basket, they saw a human child. Once Jayko saw the cubs he smiled at them.

"But mum, he's a human." Said Claw. "Yes i know dear but he lost his parents in a plane crash." Said Tania, "He was lucky to survive and I couldn't just leave him alone. Therefore I want you two to treat him like one of our own. Is that understood?" "Yes mother." Said the cubs. "Good, now then, bed time." Said Tania before picking up the basket.

Little Jayko yawned as his new mum picked him up. Once at a bed made of straw, Tania put the basket down and lay down behind it while her cubs went to sleep on either side. During the night, the cubs suddenly got the feeling to join Jayko in the basket. Luckily it was big enough for all three of them. Once in the basket, they curled up to their new brother. Together, the happy family slept through the night.

'as ten years went by claw and jayko became friends with ken the snake  banjo the bear jungo the spotted panther boco the chimp and taro the elephant, 'as they were playing jayko heard crying and so did ken,It's coming from that direction." Said Jayko. "Let's check it out." Said Ken. They followed the sound of crying and eventually found a little girl.

'as bianca felt a tap. 'aww who are you. 'am jayko a jungle boy, "am bianca i got lost oh hello little snake you are so cute, 'as bianca petted him,"Thanks, my name's Ken." Said Ken. "Eek." Said Bianca. "What's wrong?" Asked Jayko. "The snake spoke." Said a startled Bianca. "Sorry didn't mean to scare you." Said Ken.

'who me no  you didn't scare me ken i like snake just as long you don't eat me, 'me no i like birds mostly, 'good do you know where the man village, 'no but how did you get lost bianca, 'i saw a pretty butterfly and here i am but i feel really scard here,"Don't worry you're safe with us." Said Jayko.

"Yeah." Said Ken. "ohh ok  , 'as bianca begin to walk until she tip over a rock, 'ouch ohh, 'careful bianca rock are shape, 'as ken and  jayko help her up. 'thank you too sure are friendly glad i got lost here, 'she smile at both of them.Come we'll introduce you to the rest of the gang." Said Jayko, as he and Ken led Bianca though the jungle.

"as boco was munching on  banana, 'hey guys look they fine   a girl cub,The rest of the gang came to meet the girl cub. "Bianca, this is Taro the Elephant, Boco the chimp, Banjo the bear, Jungo the spotted Panther and my adopted sisters Fang and Claw the tigers." Said Jayko. "Pleased to meet you all." Said Bianca

"will howdy  there bianca nice to make a new friends,  "banjo acted like cowboy,' as banjo shake her hand fast, 'woh that welcome, 'as he let go, 'am claw  are you scare of tigers, 'as he shown his teeth , 'nop you look like a kitten, 'roar am not "woh easy there brother. 'as jayko calm him down, 'am boco do you bananas, 'um no greens apples are my fave,

"hi there am taro i love to wrestle  do you wrestle, 'yep i do with my cousin, 'and am jungo i love hearing storys that include legend, 'same here and this must be your sister hi fang what up.Pleased to meet you." Said Fang, "Jayko and I have had a close bind for a long time." "then suddenly   it begin to rain and suddenly   a wave of water was coming,

"quick everyone in the tree, shouted jayko they all clime but bianca could not, 'i cant clime help. 'then as the water was about to hite, 'jayko grabbed ken and thaw ken down,  "quick hold on, 'then bianca grabbed ken and ken loop her and they bring her into the tree which was big enough,The flood came by just after Bianca was safely in the tree.

"Thank you both, you saved my life." Said Bianca. Jayko and Ken blushed before saying, "You're welcome. 'hehehe ,giggle bianca, "where  did that come from, 'will it raining season bianca, 'ohh i see will it sure was fast how long can we stay on this branch , 'hey guys i fine a huge hole in the tree come in, "as they clime into it jayko took bianca hand and help her in there.

"Bianca blushed as she held Jayko's hand. "Well it's dry and cozy in here." Said Banjo. "Good I hate getting my fur wet." Said Jungo as she shook himself dry. "Unlike us tigers." Said Fang. "and what is that suppose To mean, 'nothing jungo, 'will it look like it we will be in here for awhile, 'gulp how long ken, "bianca was cold,Jayko pulled he close to her.

"My body heat should help you keep warm." Said Jayko. "then ken stare at them and felt jealous, 'then as he look outside he see a tree full of green apples so he stilther across the  branches and gather about ten apples.She'll love these." Said Ken, as he returned to the others. "as ken slither inside , 'hi bianca look green apple,

"ohh ken how sweet thank and there plenty for everyone, 'as she give him a kiss on the cheek.Ken blushed. They waited for the rain and flood to stop. "jayko felt like he trying to get her attention, "hmm so bored right bro. 'yeah it is, 'i could sing a song, 'sure bianca go on, "ohh it raining so hard it raining and pouring i maybe wet but it keep the plants in sharp rain what keep the world growing with out the rain it would not be so pretty there would not be any flowers or trees rain keep raining on.

Ken and Jayko enjoyed the song while everyone else dozed off. "that was wonderful bianca, 'yeah you sing  beautiful. "but it look like it put them to sleep, 'oh there music hater, 'no they were tired and it is getting later we should all get some sleep. "as bianca look in her bag she took out a huge blanket to use, "hi jayko wanna share my blanket with me.

"Sure, why not." Said Jayko as he scooted closer to Bianca as she put the blanket over them.  "isint nice, "will yeah it is, "they blush, 'ken got  a little jealous, 'hmp. "then bianca notice him, 'come on ken share it with us there plenty, 'really you sure, 'yes come on ken.  "as ken stilther into the cover.He went between them. Once he was comfy, Ken fell asleep.

"jayko and ken fondness for bianca was growing, 'by the next day bianca fine her self in ken coils. 'huh how did this happen ahh ken awake up. 'huh ohh  bianca i will. 'ken uncoil her. 'why did you coil me?. 'i didn't know i was doing that at night, 'ohh will i soppose you worry maybe, ' they blush,

"Jayko the stretched as he yawned. "Good morning Bianca, did you sleep well?' Asked Jayko. "bianca may have to kep that a secret. 'um fine how did you like the blanket, 'ii like it iv never snuggle in a blanket, 'will you can have it i don't mine i have another one in my bag just incase,

"woh you think of everything, 'i have to with the life i have, 'jayko wonder what she mint. 'let just say i move a lot when someone dangerous chase me,"I see." Said Jayko, "Who wants breakfast?"  "jungo look out side'um jayko i hate to brake it to you but look. 'as jayko look out the flood was sill there ,

"ohh no how are we going get out here, 'calm down bianca look we will pare up to fine food ken already fine apple  so you go get some more. 'right bianca want to help. 'sure, 'hold it i thought you couldn't clime tree. Claw pointed out, " 'true claw but i can jump on branches i was really scare yesterday let go ken."Right Behind You." Said Ken as he accompanied Bianca.

'as bianca jump onto each branch with ken by her side. 'why didn't you tell him. 'hmm what do you mean ken, 'that i coil you. 'will i don't want it will be our secret. 'wait between me and you. 'as he blush, 'yay we are friend ohh thse apple yum.Bianca got to work picking apples.

"as ken created a basket with his coils then he look down, 'bianca look. 'as she look down, 'aww no a crocodile great i hate them gulp it get things done, 'as they took  ten apples they jump fast into the hole, 'jayko saw  fear in her eyes, "what wronge bianca, 'we saw a huge  crocodile  out there, 'then banjo and taro look they saw it in the water,

"It's crusher." Said Taro. "He's one croc you'd want to avoid." Said banjo. Jayko hugged Bianca. "there there, I'm here." Said Jayko. 'dang it we are stuck here sis  ohh i hate him if pop were here he be tiger food, "we could all walk or in the case for me stilther  the branches to go to the high hills  where my grandfather live but taro.

""I know, I'm too heavy and I'll end up breaking the branch." Said Taro. 'there is a away guys, 'they all look at bianca. 'what do you mean, 'will jayko as i said to you i get chase a lot  do to me having powers and i can shink taro to the size of a doll and  i can carry him, 'then claw laugh, 'hahahah you yay right,

"Bianca then demonstrated her powers by shrinking Taro right in front of them. "I take that back." Said Claw. "ohh he tiny cool. 'thank fang, 'as bianca held taro in her arms , 'let move t cubs,They started moving along the branches. At the same time, Jayko and Ken kept an eye on Bianca in case she fell.

"as bianca jump  from branch to branch they all copy her movement and walk just like her. 'hey cubby  why not swim with me hehehe, 'just ignore him guys keep moving, 'jayko was  a leader to them.After an Hour or two of tree hopping they arrived at the hills. Once there, they saw their parents were there too all safe and sound,

'ohh my twins ohh are you too and jayko ok, 'where fine mom we stay in a tree, 'taro where my boy, 'then bianca put him down and unshink him, 'mom am here, 'ohh my baby boy, 'mom am not baby, 'but you were small for a sec how a mencub stay away, 'wait mom let us explain, 'no taro humans are bad.

"woh hold it Lina my son is humen hello there child Lina had  a bad dealing with man once, 'that ok miss your son been good to me and ther other, 'where are your parents, 'i came here alone on my own with out thinking then i met them and the flood came and jayko and ken save me.Jayko and Ken blushed.

"and it was her idea to shrink taro so she can carry him, 'how, Caro ask who the mother of boco. 'um she born to be  the protector of the jungle right Bianca, "yes banjo i am i came to help and i. 'as bianca made the flood vanish,"You're full of surprises." Said Jayko.
Tania could tell her adopted son liked her.

'now then all of you may return to your home. 'and they did the cubs stay with bianca, 'ohh boco that was a good lie but be more careful lieing is bad yawn, 'are you ok, 'yeah ken it just when i use a lot of power i get sleepy, "bianca how did you get them, 'will banjo i was born with them yawn, 'you feel ok. "ken was contend,

"ohh yeah jus sleepy. 'come on guys let show her to our house,During the trip, Jayko carried Bianca. "you didn't have to carry me jayko. 'i know bt you seem tired, 'thank again, 'ken wanted to coil her up since he knew she like them, 'jayko if you get tired i can coil her up. 'no am ok, 'you sure you never hide something that big, 'hey am not big i have big bone.

'fang new that jayko and ken were fighting over bianca,"I get a feeling this will end in a physical fight." Fang thought to herself. "will here we are, 'where here, 'bianca was confuse, 'look at that tree anything werid, 'no ken i see nothing, 'then banjo knock on it and a a secret stairway came out, 'ladys firsts,

"Fang went in then Bianca after Jayko put her down gently. "wow this is nice is that a rug, 'yeah i kinda took it from the village, 'jayko you lie to me then how could you. 'jayko you should never steal it bad , "but fang they were moving, 'not that you lie to bianca about the man village, 'oop. 'jayko how can trust you the way you lie pleas leave me alone, 'as bianca turn away,

"for shame jayko.ken said and stilther to bianca,Jayko then went outside to sit on a branch all by himself. "It's best we leave him alone." Said Fang. "you think sis i know that you and i notice that he has a crush on bianca. 'you notice too huh will there apple in this it call ken there rival it seem claw,

"right but he a snake how can bianca like him fang , 'will claw last night when everyone was asleep ken  coiled her to keep her safe it was so cute,Claw was surprised to hear this. "Should we tell Jayko?" Asked Claw. "no i don't think we should it would hurt him more. 'agree he is our baby brother,

"meanwhile. 'i cant believe he lie to me he could of taking me back to my parent why, 'will he never met another like himself your the first one he ever talk to hey how about il take you there. 'would you that will be great, 'but little did she know ken had no idea where it is but he will try, "then let go.

"They got out of the tree and went on their way. "then boco notice that there gone, 'um guys ken and leading bianca into the jungle , "what ok don't panic boco, "but jungo it like dangerous. 'jungo right, 'let go guys, 'as taro boco and jungo and banjo,

"Went After them, fang went to get Jayko. "Jayko, Ken is leading Bianca into the Jungle." Said Fang.Jayko just sat there still sulking."ohh come on bro brave up you what kind of tiger are you, 'as he turn away,"Jayko she really likes you." Said Fang.
"Are you sure?" Asked Jayko.

'yes am sure come on move it, 'as they ran after them, 'meanwhile bianca felt like ken did not know the way, 'aww ken are you sure where going to the right way, 'come on bianca i know it like the back of my back, 'then they fine a temple, "this is not the village  ken and let me guess you don't know the way right,

"am sorry bianca i try i really did. 'it ok, 'help!, 'they both heard it, 'what was that ken, 'don't know, 'help. 'they heard it again, come on it sound like some one in danger, 'as bianca ran in she fine s huge door, 'let me out. 'who at you how did you get in there. 'iv been trap here for years let me out,

"but who lock you in there, 'young snake and mencub help me my brother lock me in here that no good khan, 'what that my grandfather, 'what that mean your my great nephew hahahaa will il be the reason he lock me in was i was saving a child from his mouth and he seal me in pleas let me out,

"what is your name uncle, 'it nightmare pleas if you are my nephew pleas, 'bianca he family., 'ok let me, 'then bianca shink the door down,And Nightmare escaped. "why thank you too now then show me around this jungle.

"Bianca had a bad feeling about this as they showed him out "aw this way if your hungry there are birds  and mice and fish and boar  you can eat, "i think il go hunting, 'hold it sir if you see a mancubs don't  hurt him me and him are the only one in the jungle,

"do not worry child if i see him il leave him alone, "Nightmare then headed out. "ken i think you should go with him, 'but what about you, 'il be fine go. 'as ken went after him, 'meanwhile bianca fine the group, "Hey guys, where's Jayko?' Asked Bianca.

Jayko the arrived with fang, carrying a spear and knife he made years ago. "bianca where are you fang you go and look there and we go to the west, 'right, 'then bianca ran into them,"Hey guys, what's up besides the sky?" Asked Bianca"bianca what were you thinking it dangerouse to wonder in here.

"I know gang, I guess i was just angry about the revelation earlier." Said Bianca,"then banjo look around where ken?, "ohh he with his grand uncle,He has a grand uncle?" Asked a surprised Jayko. "yeah he this huge black snake with spike on his back and red eyes huh but you know i got this feeling, 'what kind, 'nothing jayko but let go see khan.

'but bianca khan is huge he hide will only ken know and  he with him you talk about, "will do yyou know ken mother."Yes we do." Said Jayko. 'fang you lead the way, 'right follow me all. "as they walk a  for an hour they fine an old tree  that had a huge hole in it, "hello miss Suzie where are you.

'who dare call me, 'it we claw and the gang, 'ohh ken friends hey there i heard about the flood, 'as  she stither out, 'sorry i was not there to help. 'ohh we got out of there but will she has something to say go on bianca. 'um me and ken fine a temple freee someone, 'then suzie sweated,"Was his name Nightmare?' Asked Suzie.

"yeah why, 'gulp guys site down and il tell you khan and nightmare were good to each but there father told them that they had gifts that no snake had nightmare can hypnotize anyone and give them a nightmare where he enter them to scare you to death, 'what no. 'yes bianca and khan my father enter dream to make good dream but  nightmare use the power and gain many minions who adore his power in fact he almost took over the jungle.

"they all chatted there teeth's, "and the worst of it all he trick them to let them get eating by him they worship him like king  my father had a enough and trick his brother to battle him in that temple you see he told his brother that there was  an ancient ring that could give him power once he got in there he was seal.So how do we stop him this time?' Asked Jayko.

"am so sorry i didn't a ohh ken with him  come on guys. 'as bianca ran the other give chase, 'il go get my father. 'as Suzy slither to in old huge tree, 'father we have trouble and ken in danger."What Kind?" Asked Khan as he slithered out. "ken and his new friend bianca unleash him. 'wait you don't mean my brother?.

""Afraid so." Said Suzie. "Then we must act fast." Said Khan. "as khan stilther  as fast as lighten, 'meanwhile nightmare had eating three boars five bird, 'boy you really are hungry, 'yess will my nephew being trap in there did made me hungry, 'then  the group fine them. 'guys you stay put,as bianca whisper,

'as she work over to them, 'aww hello sir need a word with ken, 'but as ken was about to stilther to her nightmare stop him,hello again little Girl cub." Said Nightmare. 'um sir we need  to take ken home it getting late, 'ken could tell something was up. "ohh yeah i need to g home uncle, 'no i think he can stay with me after all we are family.

"yes i know but his mother want him home, 'no ken il teach you real things that your mother never teach, 'that kind o f you uncle but i must go home, 'then nightmare coil him, 'ohh i don't think so."Hey, Let him go." Said Bianca. "then bianca  use her metal claws to poke him. 'ouch!!, "then bianca grabbed ken and they ran for there life.

""OH, now I'm angry." Said Nightmare. A few minutes later, they came across Ken's family. "mommy, 'as ken run  to his mom, 'ohh there it ok are you ok. 'yeah he wanted me to be like him i think,, 'what a baby. Said  ben who was ken older brother, 'am not and he right there coming, "ohh yay il fight him, 'then she stop her son, 'no ben your grandfather will deal with him cubs clime into my tree now, 'jayko and ken help everyone into the tree,

""Hurry." Said Jayko. he then blushes as he helped Bianca up. "thank ken, 'no p. 'as they all were in the tree with Suzy coiling them all to protect them from him, 'come down here you brat how dare you  poke me with those claw what are you. "jayko was wondering to but he ask her later about it,

'you fool us to free and this is how you treat me and ken you are a nasty jerk, 'shh bianca your going to get angry, 'sorry miss suzy, 'why you with my powers i can get you all. 'that is enough brother, "Nightmare turned around to see his brother Khan.
"I was wondering when you'ed show up." Said Nightmare.

'so it true you been free why are you after these cubs they done nothing to you. 'wronge obne has one name bianca  she has these freaky claw that came out of her finger, "as khan look at the child, 'don't be mean she only a child why would she hurt a fully grown  snake ike you,

"Because he was hurting Ken." Bianca called out. "Little blabber mouth." Nightmare called back. "as  nightmare was about to  attack them, 'then bianca put up a force field around them. 'woh you have powers cool. 'thank jungo,Khan then wrapped his tail around his brother's neck and pulled him away from them.

'leave them be and deal with me ."Fine, i've been wanting to fight you for so long." Said Nightmare. "then te begin to fight. 'as khan strike him in the back,They whipped each other, wrapped around each other and squeezed each other. The battle lasted for hour, "then  nightmare was about to choke him, "then bianca came in between them and send a shock of lighten into nightmare,.

Nightmare screamed in pain as he released his brother. 'then bianca thow him into the temple and lock him in there. 'then she  smile at khan and fainted,Jayko managed to catch her before she hit the ground. "as jayko carry her to his family cave for her  to rest,"She's so beautiful when she sleeps." Jayko thought to himself with a smile,

"jayko  do you really like her huh, 'mom it will i um,Come on son, tell the truth." Said Tania. Jayko shyly blushed before saying, "Yes I do."then ask her to stay with you. 'no i cant beside she has family beside i see that she like ken better."Don't give up my son, Give it a try, for me." Said Tania.

"Ok mother, I will, for you." Said Jayko as he hugged his mum around the neck. "as ken bring in a basket of apple, 'wait did you get that basket ken, 'will i made it for her . "it a small  skill and these are her fave green apple i hope she ok."I'm sure she will." Said Jayko. "envy begin to grow in jayko.

"then the others came, 'how bianca,jungo ask.She's fine." Said Suzie. "yawn ohh i use to much power. 'ken hug her, 'am sorry am sorry iv should of stop you. 'woh easy ken it was my frulit he was free we didn't know now calm down ken. 'but he was  my great uncle i should of just came to mom and,

"to calm ken down bianca kiss his cheek, 'shh it ok khan i scent your hiding, 'as he stilther. 'so you have power had a feeling no one with that must can only free him that door it to be unlock by magic, "sorry sir i thought he was will a a good guys, 'yes will you may be  seven but there are more danger out there,

"I understand." Said Bianca. "how are you feeling bianca, 'fine jayko ohh who bring these apples and the basket nice skill. 'it  was me, 'ohh ken this is cute you are good, 'ken blush, Tania know now that ken was charming bianca,"Jayko, now might be a good time to talk to her." Tania whispered to Jayko. "OK." Jayko then whispered back. "Jayko then walked up to her and said, 'Bianca, would you like to go for a walk later?"

'yay that would be nice but right now am hungry thank again ken, 'as bianca enjoy the apples.Jayko then went to sit down and wait for Bianca.. 'ken sate with him, 'jayko notice you have a thing for bianca, 'yay and you too. 'yay i don't know there something i like about her but do you know this mean,

"yay ken we are rivals for bianca love,"Agreed." Said Ken "may the best guy  win ken, 'agree once more jayko. 'then as bianca walk out of the cave jayko ran up to her, 'would you like a drink, 'yay i would jayko. 'come follow me. 'then as ken went after them khan stop him,"This time Ken, let those two be alone together." Said Khan.

"but grandfather i love her, 'yes but you are a snake she humen you must remember your place, 'my place is with her,Meanwhile, Bianca and Jayko arrived at the river. Once there, they started drinking. "hmm so good it nice to be out here but i miss them, 'burt bianca if you live here with me you can have adventures,

'no i cant i want my parents and my sister , 'sorry it just it good to meet another like me, 'i know jayko but i cant plea take me back pleas i miss them,Jayko hugged her. "Very will this time I'll take you home, and once you're back in the village I would like you to do me a favour." Said Jayko. "What is it?" Asked Bianca.

Jayko the took out a picture and gave it to Bianca. "Find out what you can about my real parents." Said Jayko, "My adopted mother Tania found this in the wreckage of the plane she found me near."but then bianca knew who they were. 'wait iv seen them. 'what where tell me.

"there my neighbors as i recall they did lost a child in a plan clash they look all over for him but  they left  this place never knowing what happen to there son, "Tania thought they were dead when she saw them in the wreckage." Said Jayko. "no  they weren't there another thing those to that die weren't your parents  you see jayko your mother and father had too good friends that came with them and you,

"they were there to make a film on the animals of Haiti but they hit something they lost them but more to the point they saw you  were gone  i don't know how you live here so long there be  happy to see them. "so those to that die wereint them, 'nop but there greater news,"Oh? and what's that?' Asked an eager Jayko,

'they came with us to see if they can fine you again they believe you were alive but some said to them   not to come here, 'then let go. 'as jayko gabbed bianca hand he ran  smiling, 'bianca walk as fast as she can.Very soon they arrived at the man village.  "hold it jayko , 'what wronged, "you need to get clean, 'then as she snap her finger water landed on him,

"what the hey why did you , "then bianca clap and the wind blow dried him, 'there you go nw  to  brush that hair, "as bianca brush it and snip   his hair, "there now you look like a normal child what do you think."I look great thanks. Let's go, I can't wait to meet them." Said Jayko.

"then they enter the village, 'bianca my child, 'as liz took bianca into her arms, 'ohh why did you do that where were you rob she back alexis, "they ran to her, 'bianca why did you run off, 'am sorry daddy pleas don't be  angry i was board and i follow butterfly. 'then alexis hug her,'sis don't ever do that again sure back  home we have a forest but here it, 'i know, 'then liz notice him, 'hmm who this boy, 'he jayko he a lost child he save me and i thought i could bring here listen those too who came with us where are they,

"Liz lead Jayko and Bianca to where Jayko's parents were staying. "dear i think we should not go in there, 'but peter our son he could. 'then they turn around they see bianca and a boy, 'bianca who this."This is Jayko, you're son whom you lost." Said Bianca.

Jayko's Parents walked up to him to get a good look. Once they were sure it was Jayko they tearfully hugged him. "we thought we lost you Joseph, 'his parents were happy , "i thought i ,lost you to mommy  daddy,Jayko hugged his parents back as he looked at Bianca saying, "Thank you Bianca

"bianca smile  . 'you are welcome my friend let all get home right daddy, 'yay bianca let go home, 'but jayko parents had something to say,Is something wrong?" Asked Bianca. "rob we decide to move to Australia we thought to go there and started all over we thought we would lost hope of looking for a son but he alive and will we thought Australia migt be a good place.

"Jayko and Bianca were sad about this. "am sorry honey but you can send letter to him, 'bianca was crying as her mom hug her. "may i talk to him alone pleas before we say goodbye. 'go on bianca and jayko we will call you when we are done packing, 'as both of there family pack. 'jayko there away to see each other.

'like how bianca, 'as bianca give him a watch, 'what is that  you just put on my arm, 'it a teleported watch i only give them to my closeted friends and ken have one each i left him one too just in cast, 'wow your clever, 'bianca smile, 'i know but remember don't show it to your parents it a secret between us.

"Jayko hugged Bianca"Don't worry i won't tell them." Said Jayko.  "then bianca look worry, 'what wrong bianca, "it will i had a dream that you turn into a monster i didn't want to tell you but it make me worry, 'me a monster no way i can never what kind, 'a blue metal wolf just pleas stay careful.

"and that  my kid is the end of the story, 'bianca was telling the twins ravennie and robin a story. 'did that really happen i mean is that how you met nightmare our great great uncle, 'yay he was evil. 'but mom didn't you already told us the story how you met dad already is this true, 'yeah grandma is it,"bed time you for, 'ok night,

."Night." Said the children. "as they each went into there rooms, 'bianca wonder what happen to jayko he vanished after helping her and rex deal with a villain, 'oh jayko where did you go i wish  we did end up together but sadly ken win my heart first,as a tear fell 'bianca are you ok.'as she turn to see ken, 'yeah am fine let get to bed, 'as the couple went to bed jayko howl at the moon and a tear drop from his eyes,the end
yes enjoy our story it wrote by m and by boyfriend jayko
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:star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star-half::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

The story started off really cute, but eventually became bogged down with the grammar issues and the fact the story started to ramble towards the end.

The amount when the story started was okay, and I could chalk up to a typo here, and not knowing a particular rule for grammar later on. However, later on the grammar started to get worse and worse with less and less proper capitalization used, but no space after a period and the next sentence. Grammar may seem like a trivial issue, but in reality grammar is there so people are able to read your story.

Sadly, this was a struggle to read.

And as cute as the story was, it didn't feel really original. For starters, the orphan boy from a plane crash has been done quite a bit, but you've also got a Banjo the Bear running around. Unoriginal though doesn't mean bad story, just that there isn't anything to really make it stand out.